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United Generations ( A Pokemon Fan-Fiction )
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United Generations ( A Pokemon Fan-Fiction )
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07-04-2013, 03:13 AM (This post was last modified: 07-06-2014, 11:33 AM by Fennekin_Fireninja653.)
United Generations

Chapter 1: Making Friends

A Lone Fennekin starts on a Journey, and sees a Heracross & a Rhydon, goes up to them and says hello. when all of a sudden a Vaporeon swims close to them and playfully splashes them Rhydon however runs away from the water to avoid getting wet. Seeing this Vaporeon Uses Water gun to getting Rhydon wet, Rhydon however not liking getting soaked one bit goes into a Rampage. Seeing this all the pokemon backs away except one. Rhydon then charges straight for Fennekin. Fennekin Runs & Runs & Runs, However Rhydon continues to chase poor Fennekin into a canyon. Things aren't looking good for Fennekin what will happen to Fennekin ?

Chapter 2: A Rocky Situation

As things were looking bad for Fennekin a sleeping Larvitar was rammed by Rhydon. not liking being woken up this way Larvitar pounding the ground with it's feet started an earthquake. Rhydon suddenly lost it's balance, & Rocks in the canyon starting to fall around the three pokemon. Rhydon was getting hit by the rocks but it barely hurt, Fennekin however was having trouble dodging the rocks that were falling. Some small rocks were hitting Fennekin, Fennekin didn't know how long it could continue this. Suddenly a Huge rock was starting to fall & at this rate all three pokemon (Fennekin, Rhydon, & Larvitar ) would be trapped if not crushed by the Huge rock.

-to be continued-

( Stay tunned to find out what happens next in Chapter 3 )

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07-16-2013, 12:07 PM
I would recommend fixing the errors in this before requestinbg a badge and before posting another chapter. There are so many grammar errors in this I couldn't even focus on the story. Just giving you feedback not to sound harsh.

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07-23-2013, 01:47 AM
Also, it wouldn't hurt to make it a bit longer. Chapters are usually much, much longer than seven sentences.


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